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Re: Typo and text related issues
« Reply #15 on: 22:04:57 - 11/14/12 »
In the description for Book: "Hiding His Rage: Salamanth's Legacy vol.1":

"...far to south,"

should be

"...far to the south,"

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Re: Typo and text related issues
« Reply #16 on: 19:32:54 - 11/15/12 »
Mana wyrm

Summon: Reduce target's next magic by 14 during 8 turns
But normal charms have -XY to target's next magic.

wouldn't be better to make it here as well? Like

Summon: -14 to target's next magic during 8 turns

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Re: Typo and text related issues
« Reply #17 on: 03:01:05 - 11/29/12 »
http://www.estiah.com/character/combat/replay/id/42792123/owner/97370

In turn 12, it says 'Ghost Drakeling enrages, Frozen Passion takes 19 melee damage'; however, Ghost Drakeling's description is only 'Summon: Destroy 17 Ward during 10 turns'.

I propose you modify it to 'Summon: Destroy 17 Ward or 19 Melee during 10 turns'. The Wiki lists the melee as a 'hidden effect', which makes no sense at all. Why keep this effect hidden?

Also in Water of Life, the post-Fight 4 text says: 'You walk up to the ice grail, hover over your still bleeding arm, and watch your blood slowly fills up the container.' This should be either 'as your blood slowly fills up' or 'your blood slowly fill up'. Another sentence is: 'Or not to be able feel love ever again.', which should be 'to feel love'.
« Last Edit: 05:30:58 - 11/29/12 by Mushyrulez »

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Re: Typo and text related issues
« Reply #18 on: 11:54:24 - 12/03/12 »
When sending your pet to fight/race, you get the following confirmations:

Your [pet name] has been queued for next fight.

Your [pet name] has been queued for next race.


They should be:

Your [pet name] has been queued for the next fight/race.

or

Your [pet type] has been queued for the next race/fight.

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Re: Typo and text related issues
« Reply #19 on: 20:43:20 - 12/05/12 »
King of No Man:

First page:

"...and the depiction from those gossip tellers have quickly turned the place into a horrifying hell of blood..."

Should be either:

"...and the depictions from those gossip tellers have quickly turned the place into a horrifying hell of blood..."

or

"...and the depiction from those gossip tellers has quickly turned the place into a horrifying hell of blood..."

Fight 2:

"A tyranny's level is only as high as how public his martyrs are."

Pretty sure that should be "tyrant's."

Fight 3:

""How long has it been since the last visitor" The king's loud voice echoes like a distant thunder."

Missing a ? after visitor.

"Baralas's eyes quickly glanced at to two ghosts with their face peeled off, cowering in a corner."

Since the narration is in present tense, and you have multiple ghost faces, and you don't need both "at" and "to":

"Baralas's eyes quickly glance at two ghosts with their faces peeled off, cowering in a corner."

"...but the fights of the dead makes even the saints turn their eyes away."

Should be:

"...but the fights of the dead make even the saints turn their eyes away."

Page 4:

"...we fought like primal animals, for each inch of our border"."

Put the period inside the quote since it's the end of a spoken sentence.

"...for failing to the king's order."

Looks like it's missing a verb after "to." Failing to uphold? Failing to follow?

"For each second passed while I was sitting on that throne, people died."

Should be:

"For each second that passed while I was sitting on that throne, people died."


Where We All Must Sup fight 2:

Combo charm Endangered Species:

"...the rythm of the fight"

Should be:

"...the rhythm of the fight"
« Last Edit: 23:50:44 - 12/05/12 by Pookie »

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Re: Typo and text related issues
« Reply #20 on: 08:38:25 - 12/11/12 »
The current description of the Taunt skill : "Winning is not enough for you, you like to taunt your opponent to make him understand how much you dominated". A more politically correct version, somewhat mending that (unintentional) anadiplosis, would be : "Winning is not enough for you, as you like to taunt your opponents to make them understand how much you dominated".

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Re: Typo and text related issues
« Reply #21 on: 08:35:29 - 12/12/12 »
Well when you use a break focus charm, it says "X broke his team's focus" or something like that, from what I remember.  So either that should be changed or we assume all the player characters are male.  I vote for the former.  (If the latter, then the taunt skill is technically correct!)

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Re: Typo and text related issues
« Reply #22 on: 18:35:32 - 12/13/12 »
Pretty much everything in this game assumes that characters are male. I've just learned not to take it personally whenever someone calls me "young man."  ;D


Where We All Must Sup fight 3:

"Suddenly, your fool's errand regarding the Harvester's evaporates in your mind and you remember your greatest folly. "

Should be:

"Suddenly, your fool's errand regarding the Harvesters evaporates in your mind and you remember your greatest folly. "

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Re: Typo and text related issues
« Reply #23 on: 13:55:28 - 01/01/13 »
Kenley's Club

Book: "When Gods Turn Away: The Coming Extinction of Man "
Book: "Nigh Is the Time of the Guardians "

Note the extra spaces...

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Re: Typo and text related issues
« Reply #24 on: 17:30:37 - 04/29/13 »
I saw this while looking through a skirmish fight:

4  Lezard uses [Fang of Tiamat]
Flame123 takes 4 melee damage (43 absorbed, 4 pierced)
Flame123 is afflicted by bane of Tiamat

** Battle status **
Flame123 : 1176/1180 HP, 7 Armor, 0 Ward, 0 Willpower, 63/66 Charm(s) left
Lezard : 973/1078 HP, 0 Armor, 0 Ward, 0 Willpower, 41/42 Charm(s) left

5  Flame123 uses [Champion's Crest]
Lezard takes 46 melee damage
Flame123 is more resistant to dizziness
Tail of Shaula takes effect, Flame123's melee attacks are increased by up to 2
Tail of Shaula takes effect, Flame123's armor raises to 22
Because of Bane of Tiamat, Flame123's armor drops to 6
Because of Bane of Tiamat, Flame123's ward drops to 0

Shouldn't the "b" in Bane of Tiamat be capitalized when it is applied
Flame123 uses [Black Pearl Ring]
Dreadknight Braedan takes 55 spirit damage
Flame123's willpower remains at 17
Flame123's auras duration is increased by 1 turn(s)

Dreadknight Braedan collapses of exhaustion.

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Re: Typo and text related issues
« Reply #25 on: 21:17:28 - 05/31/13 »
From what I see, the text for Small Amber Rubble and Tattered Sapphire Chunk both read:

Although this is only a small fragment, you feel that is has immense potential

The "is" should be "it"
« Last Edit: 21:20:17 - 05/31/13 by Flame123 »
Flame123 uses [Black Pearl Ring]
Dreadknight Braedan takes 55 spirit damage
Flame123's willpower remains at 17
Flame123's auras duration is increased by 1 turn(s)

Dreadknight Braedan collapses of exhaustion.